Nov 5, 2016 · A true beauty this poem is! I like the subtle rhyme between "thousand" and "surrounded" in the first 4 lines, that do not have rhyming ends. When rhymes arrive a little …

The rhymes are well done, shockedquartz, and I love rhymes, but, like Grant, I find many writes become slave to the rhyme. The longer the piece, the more difficult to sustain the rhyme …

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You have some good rhymes, a feeling tone that I can relate with in this poem. The "grittiness" of life, a certain edge, understanding the darkness. I like your poem, glad you're sharing these …